The premise of the story is interesting! I'd love to see more of it.
However, based on my perspective, there's some parts that are little hard to understand, how the pacing goes a little too fast on the realization of the MC being transported, how does the MC immediately knows what to do ater meeting the characters, and a little mistake in the spelling and grammars (I understand if you are a non native english speaker, because I am also one myself)
Besides, I still enjoyed the story. I wish you good luck on your writing development, dear author!
yeah, I realize the pacing is a bit off, I'm normally really sleep deprived whilst writing this as im working on finals and other end of year school work. I'm working on it now! thank you for your feedback! :)
Aww! No problem, dear author! I hope you find your luck in your writing journey whether you decide to go through it, or even if you don't decide to go through it. I'll support whatever path you chose.
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this is so epic actually i luv seeing trans characters in games
Rip to this I fully lost everything bc my computers charger is like 85$ and so it'll take a while for this to be updated
The premise of the story is interesting! I'd love to see more of it.
However, based on my perspective, there's some parts that are little hard to understand, how the pacing goes a little too fast on the realization of the MC being transported, how does the MC immediately knows what to do ater meeting the characters, and a little mistake in the spelling and grammars (I understand if you are a non native english speaker, because I am also one myself)
Besides, I still enjoyed the story. I wish you good luck on your writing development, dear author!
yeah, I realize the pacing is a bit off, I'm normally really sleep deprived whilst writing this as im working on finals and other end of year school work. I'm working on it now! thank you for your feedback! :)
after a few months there's been an update. I wanted to say thank you, this comment really helped me try to update this, even 7 months later.
Aww! No problem, dear author! I hope you find your luck in your writing journey whether you decide to go through it, or even if you don't decide to go through it. I'll support whatever path you chose.